If you read this, would you wanna keep reading?

If you read this, would you wanna keep reading? It's from a novella I'm working on, but this is killing me...do I start here, or do I start at the beginning? I wrote this part as a middle part, but I think it would make for a more interesting beginning, which would give me more room to play with the timeline and expose different players and motives in a more dramatic manner...any advice would be appreciated. :-)